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oh, and dark_shinobi, that wasn't cool. not at all. there's constuctive critism, and then there's the shit authors have to put up with cuz people like you are too scared to put their own heart and soul. sure, it was rushed, but all he needs to do is continue, and i'm sure that it will actually be a pretty good fic. maybe he can even rewrite the beginning a little. so unless you have like 20 fanfics of your own and your own little fan club that screams "shinobi is an amazing author!" then i suggest that you stop the flames. flaming authors just isn't cool.

Fantastic so far. this neeeeeds mooooore

WTF?! I presume you are a sad pathetic 16year old girl writing out your twisted little fantasies or worse. THAT was one of the worst stories I've ever read. It was not only poorly written but degrading in nature, to the characters of Elites and humans alike. It wasn't even 'slightly' amusing - you're an amateur writer, at best. Please don't write any more fan fiction concerning Halo, because it's a fucking disgrace. Not to mention the character of the Elite wasn't even accurate at all, considering all Elites have been brainwashed into believing humans are filth, and would never screw some little kid in two seconds flat because of a porn video. What kind of a fantasy world do you live in? If it were to happen, I would suggest it happening over a long period of time establishing a normal "relationship", or have you even heard of such a thing? It is also quite apparrent to me that you have no grasp of what the word 'reality' truely signifies and you probably sit alone in your room with your filthy musing because you have no life and nothing better to do with your time.

Hey! is there going to be a sequel of some kind to this? It wasn't bad! Just seemed a bit rushed. You should take your time. otherwise it was a great idea! you should keep going!