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by ShadowAddi

person Nathan
schedule November 14, 2013 at 12:00 AM
The store was good. I liked the development of the story line. A little backstory on both protagonists would be appreciated. Overall, good story so far.
schedule June 29, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I liked this story. Very different and definitely a what if story. But you (always a but ain't there) a little more spaces between the paragraphs would be nice! I hope to see a second chapter up there! :D
schedule March 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I happen to be a very big fan of the halo games may i just say kudos :D i liked it.... if you plan to make more chapters make em soon.... ok?
person deceit
schedule February 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I agree that this story was rushed. And maybe you could work on the plotline a little more. It has the potential to be great. Maybe go over it with other people who read halo. I dont think any one would mind.

dark_shinobi420 Im not talking to you. What you said was hurtful and uncalled for. So for all of us who hate hurtfull flaming. FUCK YOU!!!!!

If you need some help just ask and we will come running. Dont stop trying no matter what people (cough darkshinobi) say. ^,^
schedule February 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
There is a difference between criticism and flaming. Strangely enough dark_shinobi420 you managed to achieve both. ShadowAddi don't sweat crap like that. It was a really good story, it was a bit rushed however but hey most people are rushed in their stories. I'm not sure if I should ask this question or not but here I go. ''Would that even work? I mean elites are well over 6 feet tall and probably weigh 4-500 pounds. If my calculations are correct the elite would have ripped the girl in two. Also what would his dick look like. This is a mystery to me cause this never crossed my mind.'' Ponders... Oh shit now I cant get the images of tentacle porn out of my head. NOOOOOOOOOOOOO...

P.S. To those who understand what this means.......I LOST.......
person oath_keeper289
schedule July 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i'm scared... hold me.
person sundast
schedule July 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i liked it.......did feel a bit rushed though
person JoxBox
schedule January 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I Love it !!!
person DeCann
schedule January 12, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Excellent attempt at a covenant/human fic, can't wait for the next chapter and can only suggest that youn add more detail.

P.S. dark_shinobi should go fuck him/herself, they wouldn't know a good fic if it bit them on the arse!
person Annonymouse
schedule December 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
First off, decent story. Secondly, how does one fall in love with someone that just raped you? Does it have something to do with the hot feeling? Or is that normal for women? I've never bothered asking... Interesting story, though. You have your 15+ reviews. Now go and write the next chapter.