rate_review Reviews

I just realized that my first review may have come off as a little too critical. I made it sound like chapter 1 isn't good at all, when really it's awesome(although not nearly as awesome as chapter 2). It's just that it had a few problems which chapter 2 didn't have, that kept it from being as outstanding as it could have been. I'm only criticizing because this is one of the best fics in the GS section, and without the problems it would be absolutely perfect.

Also, I've now read most of the stories in the GS section, and I'm putting this one in the Top Five GS fics on my profile page. It really is that good.

This is outstanding stuff. Sensual, descriptive, and the characters are convincing. The trouble is, the sex in chapter 1 is a bit overdone. Too idealized. And no offense, but "with the greatest feeling of pleasure ever" sounds like something a five-year-old would say. Also, you use the adjective "incestuous" too much. I felt like you kept saying to me, "So did I mention that this is incest? That's right, incest. Isn't that hot?"

Chapter 2 is much better. The sex is more real than in chapter 1, and for that reason it's actually twice as arousing. The part where Felix couldn't hold in long enough for Jenna to have her orgasm just blew my mind. The only thing is that the ending is too sudden... they just abruptly decide to stop what they're doing. You need to do a continuation where Jenna has Felix's baby, and how they deal with that. That would make this already spectacular fic even more awesome.

Mmm...yes, good.

Wow. Incest with a conscience. Still, I've looked all over this site, and I haven't seen the one pairing I REALLY want: Felix/Sheba. C'mon, Felix was such a noble hero atop Venus Lighthouse, diving off the edge after her...It's romantic. And even though it looks like more because Felix looks a little older than he is and Sheba a bit younger, they're only four years apart. Not so strange...

The first chapter was good; the second was a half-assed ending and a complete cop out and would be better if it wasn't there.

not bad.
have you considered a Shiba/Ivan

Screw other people's thoughts! They love eachother and they love making love to one another, so why not? Besides, anal won't get Jenna pregnant. I just hope she isn't. If she is, they're screwed. In the bad way.

Verrrry tasty. Since it seems to be on the subject of incest currently, how about throwing some Ivan/Hama into the mix? I mean, who's done that before? ^^;

YES!! Great chapter

Seriously, they'd be the ultimate pairing if only they weren't related. Back onto your fic. Well written, no grammar mistakes from what I could see so it's damn near perfect. Also, if you continue this, can you write a Felix/Mia softshipping? As a separate thing. That'd be great!

You rock!

~*~The Wind Rider~*~