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June 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ohhhhh!!! That was soooo good, babe!! man, you gotta write a sequel!!! (You made Verge hawt. Congratulations!! *hands over a stuffed Kitty.*) D LOVED it..
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June 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You need to have Dante go visit Vergil... *evil smirk* The entire time that I was reading this I kept visualizing Vergil's room mate in some hotel wide awake and terrified. *giggles like a freaK* ^__^ ya know.. for not having word your spelling and grammer was really good. *pats ya on the head* keep writing... *stares* O_O *keeps staring till you write more*
~sheero
~sheero
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June 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hi Kat!
That was assuredly the best phone sex story I've ever read, and Vergil/Dante makes it all the better. It was both tawdry and sweet, and your Vergil is beautifully solemn, with a characteristically dry humor that bespeaks his canon self very well. You painted him as a restrained and tender big brother, easy to imagine in their early years- tolerant, affectionate and indulgent. Dante is really true as well- impulsive, enamored and needy. Aside from a few spelling and tense errors that any beta worth her salt could knock out in two shakes, I found the writing spare, aesthetic and genuine. Dialogue is aces. As for continuance- yes, please. I could see either avenue working out well- Dante is of course incredibly impatient, so the idea of him surprising Vergil in his [dorm?] is pretty fun, but then again, Vergil is so prone to Dante-inflicted guilt I can completely see him showing up in the middle of the night to ahem* make amends. Option two kind of seems to resonate more with me, but hey, I just think demonstrative Vergil is uber hot. By the way, if you ever want a beta, drop me a line. I did this all last semester as an English TA. I'm pretty infallible. >;.D
That was assuredly the best phone sex story I've ever read, and Vergil/Dante makes it all the better. It was both tawdry and sweet, and your Vergil is beautifully solemn, with a characteristically dry humor that bespeaks his canon self very well. You painted him as a restrained and tender big brother, easy to imagine in their early years- tolerant, affectionate and indulgent. Dante is really true as well- impulsive, enamored and needy. Aside from a few spelling and tense errors that any beta worth her salt could knock out in two shakes, I found the writing spare, aesthetic and genuine. Dialogue is aces. As for continuance- yes, please. I could see either avenue working out well- Dante is of course incredibly impatient, so the idea of him surprising Vergil in his [dorm?] is pretty fun, but then again, Vergil is so prone to Dante-inflicted guilt I can completely see him showing up in the middle of the night to ahem* make amends. Option two kind of seems to resonate more with me, but hey, I just think demonstrative Vergil is uber hot. By the way, if you ever want a beta, drop me a line. I did this all last semester as an English TA. I'm pretty infallible. >;.D