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September 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
It made me cry at the end. What more can I say? You have an excellent vocabulary and are very descriptive. I think I could learn from this. Good work, and I hope you do more.
- kourya
- kourya
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October 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*sobbing uncontrollably* my...god...that was so...sad in the end!!! poor Zelos!! i looved it so much!!!
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October 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This was an absolutely amazing work of fanfiction.
I'm impressed how you incorporated a wide vocabulary without overdoing it, which made the language feel very fresh throughout the entire story. Also, you managed to portray their behaviour very believably. Plus, it had no errors that interfered with the story (if any, since I didn't see a single one), and so it could be read smoothly. The diction was clear and demanded no rereading just to understand what was going on, although it does ask to be reread just for the fact that it's so very good. The lemon scene was also very well-put together and organised.
Well done! Definitely going on my Recommended Reading list.
I'm impressed how you incorporated a wide vocabulary without overdoing it, which made the language feel very fresh throughout the entire story. Also, you managed to portray their behaviour very believably. Plus, it had no errors that interfered with the story (if any, since I didn't see a single one), and so it could be read smoothly. The diction was clear and demanded no rereading just to understand what was going on, although it does ask to be reread just for the fact that it's so very good. The lemon scene was also very well-put together and organised.
Well done! Definitely going on my Recommended Reading list.
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September 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is the first Kratos/Zelos pairing I've ever read! Thanks for being brave enough to write it! =)
Mmm... just for refrence though, I believe only girls have a g-spot, and for boys it's called either the a-spot or just the prostate (more used).
I like the drama/angst in the beginning and the lemony goodness afterwards. Very nice. ^_~
Mmm... just for refrence though, I believe only girls have a g-spot, and for boys it's called either the a-spot or just the prostate (more used).
I like the drama/angst in the beginning and the lemony goodness afterwards. Very nice. ^_~
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July 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hey that was awsome eventhough it was ur first! well
good luck on making another
coolgirl
good luck on making another
coolgirl
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May 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
THAT WAS AWESOME!!!
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May 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You're a great writer. I have no complaints. You tied it in with the original storyline very well, and it was an emotional story, not just a dirty, pointless lemon. You did a very good job on this. ^-^
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May 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I have read this story so many times, and I love it! I also read the unlemony version. You're a great author. And the Kratos/Zelos fandom is severely lacking, so good job on chosing an uncommon pairing.
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May 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I never thought I would like that pairing...but that was absolutely amazing. Please write more about those too! Maybe a sequel to this? You have me wanting more stories with them now...
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May 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Okay, I didn't say this in my review at ff.net...I feel as thought the middle got a little to0 sappy for me (but alot of things are too sappy for me...) But I guess it fits in context considering the fact that Zelos is having a mini little break-down. I was dreading the lemon because I thought it was going to be ultra-sappy as well (considering what led up to it) but I was suprised to find that it was more needy than anything else. I actually think the lemon was pretty good, which is high praise from me considering I'm not a big fan of lemons...so, bravo! ^^