rate_review Reviews

WOW!! You really really wrote a great story!!! The end was so sad (although I did see it coming ^^)! Oh man!! This story is MGS worthy!! I think I'll read it again ^^

Oh, and btw: google did a much better job on the german in chapter 27, one sentence was completely right!
"Ich entschuldige mich, Arthur, aber die Welt muss verstehen" - "Es tut mir leid, A., aber die Welt muss erfahren" (I apologize, A., but the world needs to know)
"Diese zwei sind in der Liga zusammen, A., Ocelot möchte MG zerstören. Es liegt auf der Hand." - "Die zwei stecken zusammen unter einer Decke, A., Ocelot will MG zerstören ..." (They are in this together, A., Ocelot wants to destroy MG. ...)
So I hope I didn't bother you too much with my german. ^^

Now I'll read your story again!

Wow! Ocelot - Big Boss - Arthur! This is getting sooo interesting!!

You know, I'm german and reading this translations is so horrible! If you can chance it or want to let me help:
"Sind Sie dort" correct would be: "Bist du da?" (Are you there?)
"Ellen, Sie müssen den Bereich verlassen." - "Ellen, du musst von hier verschwinden." (You have to get out of here)
"Es ist zu gefährlich, sie denken, dass ich ein Traitor bin." - "Es ist zu gefährlich, sie denken, dass ich ein Verräter bin." (It's too dangerous, they think I'm a traitor.)
"Durchlauf" - "Flieh" (get away!)

You don't have to chance, but if you want to, now you can ^^

I can't wait to read the end of it!!!!

I know you posted this YEARS ago ^^ but I started last week searching for MGS fanfictions at adultffnet, so I hope you'll forgive me for the late review.

I like your story! It's well written, the characters are great (I love how you write Big Boss!!) and your plot is fascinating and exciting!!

I'll review again at the end!!

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I think I'm going to cry...
But...Congratulations on finally finishing it!
So Ocelot did kill Arthur in the end.
Gaaah. I think I need to go read something completely absurd now.
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Wonderful job!
*applauds wildly*

Shaa... I love your writing soo much! There really isn't enough Ocelot and Big Boss. Poor Arthur, though...

-May the fics be with you.

*twitch* With OCELOT?! *sighs* You're a sadist you know that?
You know if it weren't a copyright infringment you could probably title this story "Things Fall Apart."
*sigh* Poor Boss...Poor Arthur...You even have me pitying Ocelot for cripes sake!
Of course saying that he missed the planes was not the smartest thing for Boss to do. Though Arthur wasn't being any better.
Well, not wanting to take kids outr of school is valid, but Poor Hal! I know whats bugging him...*sniffle*
JULIES A *$%#@!!!
Still, a great two chapters!
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Can we possibly see some... graphic scenes between Big Boss and Ocelot?

Wow....oh wow.....Geeze. Poor poor guys....
Nice Game references.
Keep it up!
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Well...Dang...maybe it WOULD be better if Arthur left.
Leave Big Boss alone with Ocelot, since that gunslinging little *growl* cause he makes him so much happier.
Oh...oh no! You're not making this one of the reasons he commits suicide are you?!
Well If you are I demand to see an appropriate display of Grief from John.
*kicks Ocelot* Butthead.
*shakes fist* I will have Vengance on the Patriots!
But as a side note, You did good making Big Boss scary for the interrogation.
Can't wait until next wednsday!
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Wow....good job of making Ocelot human, even if I WOULD rather hate the bastard.
Arthur is NOT sleeping around is he? That's just Ocelot being Paranoid right?
As for Petrovich, hmmm...
*stabs the la-li-lu-le-lo*
At least no ones thought about kidnapping Arthur.
Keep it up! You're almost to the finish line!
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