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September 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
God, when I first started reading SBaT and saw the small amount of chapters and that it was as Mary Sure I though I was going to be dissapointed, but boy was I wrong!
It's a highly entertaining and vivid story that has had me glued to the screen for the past several hours laughing at the characters antics and reading with axiety hoping that something major happens between Link and Aurea! I'm really looking foward to the next chapters and I do hope you'll continue to the end.
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It's a highly entertaining and vivid story that has had me glued to the screen for the past several hours laughing at the characters antics and reading with axiety hoping that something major happens between Link and Aurea! I'm really looking foward to the next chapters and I do hope you'll continue to the end.
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July 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Uh, you guys still realize that you are free to reveiw however you want, I'm not gonna censor that (Being the liberal that I am). Just know that if you have problems with my writing, there's not need to be rude about it and those who choose to be rude run the risk of being the subject of ridicule. If you can't take it, then don't dish it out. Like I say, I won't censor what you people write about my work, YOU'RE ALL ENTITLED TO YOUR OWN OPINION. Jus so we're clear on that. And thanks to those who review; good or bad, it seriously does help.
Sincerely,
The Mentally Unhinged
Sincerely,
The Mentally Unhinged
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July 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Interesting... Very well written, please update soon, I gotta see what happens next!
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May 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
one word: Excellent.
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May 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
" M/F Link/OC Pathetic I know."
Admission is the first step towards correction. Mebbe you should keep your fantasies of having sex with Link to yourself. If you still want to share them, please bone up on your grammar and spelling first. Otherwise reading this story is a waste of time.
Admission is the first step towards correction. Mebbe you should keep your fantasies of having sex with Link to yourself. If you still want to share them, please bone up on your grammar and spelling first. Otherwise reading this story is a waste of time.
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May 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Keep going, this is good.
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May 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You might want to look up what a MarySue is, because you've got a huge stinker of one here.
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May 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wonderful, just as usual.
It amazes me that you manage to write such long chapters, and yet you don't give away that much information. It's a great way to keep your readers hooked. Aurea's begun to trust Link, eh? "You can't hide it anymore, Aurea, we can tell by the way you cried on his shoulder!" Judging by her temperament, it's not like she'd allow herself to cry like that in the presence of just anybody.
Those guards are driving me insane. They always manage to ruin the mood! I hope they never catch Aurea... and I can't help but wonder who eavesdropped on her and Link.
Haha, I found Link's comment ("I've got a hard head") extremely funny. It just fit so well... great job on that. And the burning mark appeared again... that's remarkable.
I am eagerly awaiting your next update.
-The Anonymous Reviewer
It amazes me that you manage to write such long chapters, and yet you don't give away that much information. It's a great way to keep your readers hooked. Aurea's begun to trust Link, eh? "You can't hide it anymore, Aurea, we can tell by the way you cried on his shoulder!" Judging by her temperament, it's not like she'd allow herself to cry like that in the presence of just anybody.
Those guards are driving me insane. They always manage to ruin the mood! I hope they never catch Aurea... and I can't help but wonder who eavesdropped on her and Link.
Haha, I found Link's comment ("I've got a hard head") extremely funny. It just fit so well... great job on that. And the burning mark appeared again... that's remarkable.
I am eagerly awaiting your next update.
-The Anonymous Reviewer
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May 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It's me again... =P
-points up- I read Lady's review and I agree with everything she said. She knows her stuff, too. -nods- I'm really thankful you're letting Link and Aurea's relationship develop slowly, nothing annoys me more than stories where the two main characters meet, confess their eternal love for each other and have sex in ten minutes or less. So, thanks! I like your plot, it's hard to see where it's going! I'm glad we found out what happened to Zelda, but I'm willing to bet she didn't catch a normal fever... that's just me, I guess I'll find out sooner or later.
I appreciate that you put so much detail into the story, for instance when Link is sitting in the kitchen and he discovers a burn mark on the table. It's such a tiny detail, but it adds so much depth to the story.
I will be awaiting the next chapter. Keep up your good work, but take your time. Waiting a while only makes the next update sweeter, you know?
-The Anonoymous Reviewer
-points up- I read Lady's review and I agree with everything she said. She knows her stuff, too. -nods- I'm really thankful you're letting Link and Aurea's relationship develop slowly, nothing annoys me more than stories where the two main characters meet, confess their eternal love for each other and have sex in ten minutes or less. So, thanks! I like your plot, it's hard to see where it's going! I'm glad we found out what happened to Zelda, but I'm willing to bet she didn't catch a normal fever... that's just me, I guess I'll find out sooner or later.
I appreciate that you put so much detail into the story, for instance when Link is sitting in the kitchen and he discovers a burn mark on the table. It's such a tiny detail, but it adds so much depth to the story.
I will be awaiting the next chapter. Keep up your good work, but take your time. Waiting a while only makes the next update sweeter, you know?
-The Anonoymous Reviewer
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May 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hmmm. Where should I start.
For starters, plot. Don't think I'm here to beat you up; I'm not. I like your plot. It's a bit odd and unsatisfying in that we don't know what she's doing there or even how she got there. It's almost like she just appeared out of thin air. But I'm not going to ask any questions, because I'm sure that will all be explained in due time.
Second, story formation. I could see your transition as the chapters went on. The first one or two chapters seemed haphazard; although you do have great detail in them they were kind of hard to shift through. The ideas were all over the place. But you got more organized as you went along. Good job.
Third, your character. She's a bossy thing isn't she? With a lot of spunk. Still, she's a little strange and out of place in the Zelda world, but I'm assuming she's supposed to be, as it is clear that she is not from this world. I have no qualms about her. OCs aren't my thing, but as she goes, she's not so bad. Rather entertaining actually; I found myself laughing at her a few times. I can relate, in that I know girls just like her. Mouthy little thing. Except I don't want to punch her lights out. So that's good.
Fourth, her relationship with Link: development is slow. Please for God's sake I am begging you to keep it that way. Don't all of a sudden have them jump up and out of nowhere declare their love for each other. People, despite what they say, do not fall in love instantly. It takes time to learn how to care for a person, then to love them. Please keep this in mind when continuing to write this out.
Suggestions? A beta reader. Every author needs one in my opinion. A good one. I have the best; she checks my spelling, grammar and gives me her brutally honest opinion on everything that's going on in my fic: how it fits, whether Link is staying in character with the story line, whether something is out of place or amiss, or a word that doesn't belong in a specific description. Twisted Futurity wouldn't be half as good if it wasn't for her. And she reminds me of your character too; man can she be mouthy. XD Maybe that's why I like her.
You absolutely have a good imagination. I reccommend testing it, stretching it just a bit. Descriptions like describing the blades of grass as green flames, and Link and Aurea's spats give me hints at your potential. Keep working hard at it, as a gift like this shouldn't be wasted. People didn't review me at first either. Know what though? That just gives you time to find your zone, and practice, practice, practice. Yes, it's frustrating, but it pays off in the end. Trust me, it does.
For starters, plot. Don't think I'm here to beat you up; I'm not. I like your plot. It's a bit odd and unsatisfying in that we don't know what she's doing there or even how she got there. It's almost like she just appeared out of thin air. But I'm not going to ask any questions, because I'm sure that will all be explained in due time.
Second, story formation. I could see your transition as the chapters went on. The first one or two chapters seemed haphazard; although you do have great detail in them they were kind of hard to shift through. The ideas were all over the place. But you got more organized as you went along. Good job.
Third, your character. She's a bossy thing isn't she? With a lot of spunk. Still, she's a little strange and out of place in the Zelda world, but I'm assuming she's supposed to be, as it is clear that she is not from this world. I have no qualms about her. OCs aren't my thing, but as she goes, she's not so bad. Rather entertaining actually; I found myself laughing at her a few times. I can relate, in that I know girls just like her. Mouthy little thing. Except I don't want to punch her lights out. So that's good.
Fourth, her relationship with Link: development is slow. Please for God's sake I am begging you to keep it that way. Don't all of a sudden have them jump up and out of nowhere declare their love for each other. People, despite what they say, do not fall in love instantly. It takes time to learn how to care for a person, then to love them. Please keep this in mind when continuing to write this out.
Suggestions? A beta reader. Every author needs one in my opinion. A good one. I have the best; she checks my spelling, grammar and gives me her brutally honest opinion on everything that's going on in my fic: how it fits, whether Link is staying in character with the story line, whether something is out of place or amiss, or a word that doesn't belong in a specific description. Twisted Futurity wouldn't be half as good if it wasn't for her. And she reminds me of your character too; man can she be mouthy. XD Maybe that's why I like her.
You absolutely have a good imagination. I reccommend testing it, stretching it just a bit. Descriptions like describing the blades of grass as green flames, and Link and Aurea's spats give me hints at your potential. Keep working hard at it, as a gift like this shouldn't be wasted. People didn't review me at first either. Know what though? That just gives you time to find your zone, and practice, practice, practice. Yes, it's frustrating, but it pays off in the end. Trust me, it does.