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December 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is one of the best fanfics if not the best fanfic I have EVER read. Just amazing, I can't think of any other word that I could use to describe it. I'm really looking foward to reading future chapters. Keep up the great work!
-Jason (Yeah...I'm a Zelda fan ^_^)
-Jason (Yeah...I'm a Zelda fan ^_^)
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December 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ahem.. i think you should write more of this fic, i was getting pretty sick of the full on kinky ones so i think yours was one of the best i read^^ keep writing!
love, me
love, me
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December 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
great story so far i enjoy the building relationship and character developement as apposed to just rushing into the relationship. keep up the good work and look forward to the next chapter
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November 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Some quick constructive criticism for ya from a fellow LoZ fanfic writer.
I like how this goes. However, as far as grammar and spelling goes, you leave some serious room to be desired. Your best bet is to use spell check just before you post, go over it a second time before you post it, then after it's posted, scan it once more, and if you see anything wrong, then edit it out...
Or just delete the chapter, redo the document on your computer, and replace the deleted chapter with that one. I for one cannot figure out this damn editting thing on this site.
You are excellent as far as capitalization goes, which I'm finding is a rare skill in writers on this site these days. However, the Enter key is your friend...make your paragraphs smaller, and be sure to GET TO THE POINT. Heh, not to be blasting you or anything on detail, I love it myself, but sometimes there is something called unneccessary detail, and you have a LOT of it. Remember, it's a story, not a chronological recording of every last little thing done. I got halfway down to the second chapter and stopped, because it seemed like I was reading in slow motion; not very common for someone who is able to read up to 360 words a minute and type 55 words a minute.
And never forget the power of suspense. You'd do great with suspense if you can wing it in the right place.
Overall, a 7 out of 10 on my rating, which translates to a 4 star rating. Keep it up!
I like how this goes. However, as far as grammar and spelling goes, you leave some serious room to be desired. Your best bet is to use spell check just before you post, go over it a second time before you post it, then after it's posted, scan it once more, and if you see anything wrong, then edit it out...
Or just delete the chapter, redo the document on your computer, and replace the deleted chapter with that one. I for one cannot figure out this damn editting thing on this site.
You are excellent as far as capitalization goes, which I'm finding is a rare skill in writers on this site these days. However, the Enter key is your friend...make your paragraphs smaller, and be sure to GET TO THE POINT. Heh, not to be blasting you or anything on detail, I love it myself, but sometimes there is something called unneccessary detail, and you have a LOT of it. Remember, it's a story, not a chronological recording of every last little thing done. I got halfway down to the second chapter and stopped, because it seemed like I was reading in slow motion; not very common for someone who is able to read up to 360 words a minute and type 55 words a minute.
And never forget the power of suspense. You'd do great with suspense if you can wing it in the right place.
Overall, a 7 out of 10 on my rating, which translates to a 4 star rating. Keep it up!
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November 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh, and to Tiae or whatever and "ANyone but Mary..."
For one thing, this is a site where we are liberally granted the right to do whatever the fuck we want to do. You two can go about your yaoi-lover fest, nobody will attack you for it, not even me, despite my actions against such things last year when everyone started getting in my face about using OCs so much. But leave aspiring OC writers and anyone NOT writing yaoi or yuri the fuck alone! You yaoi/yuri fangirls/boys show the hospitality of a damn black widow and it's going to kill this site one day.
For one thing, this is a site where we are liberally granted the right to do whatever the fuck we want to do. You two can go about your yaoi-lover fest, nobody will attack you for it, not even me, despite my actions against such things last year when everyone started getting in my face about using OCs so much. But leave aspiring OC writers and anyone NOT writing yaoi or yuri the fuck alone! You yaoi/yuri fangirls/boys show the hospitality of a damn black widow and it's going to kill this site one day.
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November 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
'She Bears A Triforce' is well written. Even though I find that the Chapters are a bit to long and tend to drag things on, I believe that you have a lot of potential. I am looking forward to the next Chapters and have to give congrats to you, I myself could never write a story with such ease.
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November 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow. That was impressive. other than the mispellings this was a 10 out of 10. Great work!
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November 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I was so happy to see that She Bears A Triforce had finally been updated! I liked this chapter a lot, and I'm looking forward to seeing how the story develops, especially Link and Aurea's relationship. Keep up the good work!
Until next time,
The Anonymous Reviewer
Until next time,
The Anonymous Reviewer
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October 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very good! Very well done! I like it please continue!
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September 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
God, when I first started reading SBaT and saw the small amount of chapters and that it was as Mary Sure I though I was going to be dissapointed, but boy was I wrong!
It's a highly entertaining and vivid story that has had me glued to the screen for the past several hours laughing at the characters antics and reading with axiety hoping that something major happens between Link and Aurea! I'm really looking foward to the next chapters and I do hope you'll continue to the end.
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It's a highly entertaining and vivid story that has had me glued to the screen for the past several hours laughing at the characters antics and reading with axiety hoping that something major happens between Link and Aurea! I'm really looking foward to the next chapters and I do hope you'll continue to the end.
;)