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for Tempest

by JadeFrost

person piaZ (not signed in)
schedule February 7, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This is totally hot. Bravo, baby! :)
person Mickey
schedule December 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very nice, I generally prefer a story with a plot but when I find something like this I find myself suddenly thinking "To hell with a plot!" Although this scene doesn't have much point besides the obvious the author is so good at writing passion that I really don't mind at all. Very nice job with this one, Highly recommended.

Mickey
person Anon
schedule May 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Lovely! Absolutely stunning! :D

I read this one a while ago and I don't remember why I didn't review. Hm.

Anywho...

I adore your descriptions of Leon. (In my mind, he is the hottest thing on this planet, if not in the universe.) And this is just how I thought of him- not always gentle, powerful, dominant... "hands rough from work," etc...

And Jill/Leon is different, but quite enjoyable. Maybe you can write one from his PoV.

The only thing I can critique is one description- the one that had to do with a monkey (I can't quite remember exactly how it went). That one, while original and not bad at all, struck me as a bit odd and out-of-context. There was also a spelling error involving an 's, but nothing too serious. I'm just really picky like that. :)

I hope you have plans to continue this. I enjoyed it very much. :D

~random reviewer-chick~