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Very intense, powerful snippet of prose. Perfectly in character, too. Durer's part was extremely dirty, possessive, degrading, and thus nothing short of terrifying. Although, I have a feeling that you were a bit too repetitive, overusing the word 'fuck' all the time (no way; who'd expect a word like that on Adult FFNet? :P XD), and repeating certain terms so that they lost some of their shock value.
I liked the paragraph about Vallewida's "ignominious end in the army" the most, being the dirty creature that I am.
Vallewida's part, of course, made me go 'ouch'. You made him remember some things Durer did to him while celebrating his promotion, and I'm sure you were referring to one of your other fics. Damn. By giving Vallewida a better memory you write him as being even more angsty and traumatized than he already is.

This was gorgeously written. You commanded both personalities very well, and the writing was descriptive and dark, and had a wonderfully unique flavor to it.
I really enjoyed this. It seems like something that would take a lot of work to write.

That was beautiful and that's why I'm depressed. My Enzai fics seem to be total crap compared to it;_; I wish I could write like you.

Awesome story. I love Durer/Vallewida and you captured both of them exactly the way they are. This story is the heart of what Enzai is about and has more character study in it than a full psychology paper.