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for Chrono Trigger: Loyalty

by Shadowflare

person Elle
schedule June 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is very,very good!I like the idea of Zeal using her mind-control techniques,please update soon :)
person sirhcnotlih
schedule April 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This was very good!

I enjoyed it.

5 out of 5!

PS-Do you have a proofreader?
person Rob
schedule April 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Nice story, not to many of these around. A little F/F anal would be nice...
person sapphire weapon
schedule April 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Good story. But please update soon. It's been 2 month and I am looking foward to the next chapter!
person The PD
schedule February 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
nice... very nice....

Good plot, acurate insanity on the queen (I think) and good description of "Sara".


Sujestion:
Robot - Marle action?
person Swiftage
schedule February 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Incredible use of Chrono Trigger theme elements. The story has much potential with Queen Zeal's magic. Perhaps you'll have some kinky ways to make our characters climax? Make sure you include the other female characters and this story will be perfect!
person RDN
schedule February 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
...now, why would THAT name be chosen? Perhaps the Queen wants a substitute for the one that got away?
person Anon
schedule February 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
im not a fan of mind control stuff...but i liek the potnetial this fic has! some possible ideas
1. when ur breaking wills, bondage chambers are always useful...;D
2 maybe zeal could have a broken schala as a playmat servant for marle
3: i bet with her magic zeal could make some great toys...
plz keep it up i bet this wil turn out great cuz u write it pretty good