rate_review Reviews

One of the few fanfics I have ever read and the most well-written of them. Could use some minor editing, especially for repeated words and grammatical tweaks, but overall admirable.

One example of a revision-
Original: "Cables ran thick and serpent-like toward the middle of the room, where a large oversize chair sat like a forgotten grotesque toy."
Revision: "Serpentine cables ran thick to the center of the room where an oversized chair sat like a grotesque forgotten toy."

I hate fan fiction, so for me to enjoy reading this is quite an accomplishment.

I really am enjoying this series of fic, especially the rewrites. The first time around was well done, but the changes that you have made work for me so much better. Keep up the great work!

Okay, I finally managed to log on to review. First of all, I've read your RE stories and love them. I applaud your desire to go back chapter by chapter and revise. That shows a dedication that many don't bother with. Secondly, Saddler is indeed a clever being and I could envision each part of the story as I read it. For me to get so pulled into a story means that the author has to have a way with writing in a perfectly descriptive way.

I'm looking forward to your next revised chapter as well as the next chapter of DAOP even if Leon isn't in it until the end.

HORRRIBLE..........just kidding.im constantly checking your LJ for upates, im hooked to your writing.

Hi, for once I will review on this site. Even though we (the site and I) hate each other. Anyway, love the fic (this is my....third read through?) uhmm but I kind of noticed a repeated spelling error. It's nothing big but you constantly have "secrete" as opposed to "secret." In some cases "secrete" might be the word you wanted, but I think you want "secret." That's all, sorry for bringing in spelling cause I honestly don't really like when people do that in reviews, so yeah. Can't wait for whenever the next DAOP comes out ^_^

I've been reading both Rare and Ashes over and over again, each time I notice more details that contribute to the story. I think it really has to be read several times to be fully absorbed. Which kind of adds to the page hits but not review hits. But I will make more of an effort to review in the future ^^ The one memorable line that stood out in my mind was, "In Leon's land, the fun never stops." how true, poor Leon XD

“Well, it is my aura; I think I should have a right to know what color it was before you started eating it!”

That line made me CRACK UP for some reason. I actually woke my dog...

The notion has crossed my mind that perhaps there are a significant people frequenting this website who are underage? The sheer idiocy of flame wars astounds me. I mean really, it reminds me of when I was seven.

But moving along before thinking about it makes my own IQ drop to their level.

As you undoubtedly already know through LJ, I think your writing is fantastic. Honestly. Not just to impress any other bitter and moping authors that might be milling about the review page. Very few published stories are of this calibre.

The characterisations and plot are delightful. I have waited eagerly for every one of your chapters (both of this story, and others) and have never been disappointed with a boring, predictable plot or dull characters, or uninspiring dialogue. Most often I find myself marvelling at your ideas.

I particularly enjoy the descriptions that arise from your use of language. These descriptions are made all the more poignant by the way you challenge convention. And that, of course, it was separates "tales" from "art". Too many authors are bound by stereotypical styles of writing that results in dull (but perplexingly acceptable) stories that are more like fairy-tales for three year olds than linguistic delights. As I say, you have managed to develop a unique and almost lyrical style.

Unfortunately, this often goes over the heads of the fools who are to ignorant to understand the difference between weekly trash magazines and literature.

How mature. Yeah, lets go and flame a story just because *our* story was flamed; and of course all because Maia gave a decent (it wasn't that bad guys...seriously) critique, that means she must have made the ANON one too. Really, give it a rest. This flame war is highschool crap, and needs to stop. You can't take constructive criticism it seems, so perhaps concentrate on that besides running over and flaming a fic for the hell of it.

GROW UP!

...wow...this is so vulgar and boring that it isn't even funny. I'm surprised that so many groupies have blinded themselves to the sheer unoriginality of your fic. I mean, how many times has ALL of this been done before? Countless.

I have nothing more to add to this review, suffice to say that I was thoroughly bored and half the time I wanted to poke my eyes out. You made them bleed and I figured that gouging them out might lessen the pain.