rate_review Reviews

ooh! I hope you write more! I love resident evil Yaoi, leon/saddler is hard to find! But the pairing just has something to it. It's awesomley written! Detail is amazing! I really like Leon's bone wings. I can picture evrything in my head as I read. Well done! :)

Read the most recent chapter. Not much action here, but the emotion and intensity is quite intricately built up. However, I think the heavy metaphors and abstraction would be exhausting to read if it carried on for *too* long, but it is very appropriate for this chapter, especially since we have a character death. I like that Ada's character has more structure to it, at least what is shown here, which is mostly emotional. Saddler is also enjoyable, built in part for a story rather than a game, but without making him seem too far from canon.

I'm glad you're keeping the "wings" a very alien and yet instinctive aspect to Leon. It seems they're being used to add an element of potential power and monstrosity to him, which makes his infection more believable. It was a stretch, but one that achieved its goal for being carefully written. Leon, to me, is not as good a character if put in too compromising of a situation, and there'd be no story if he gleaned too much control as well, so you are, so far, balancing this well. He's also still human enough to connect with, making his experience, even as something else altogether, still very intriguing.

Look forward to some interesting interaction between Saddler and Leon in the next chapter. I always enjoy the awkward and even volatile exchanges between protagonists and antagonists--probably a sucker for it, even.

Wow! As usual, your story keeps us on our toes! Well written, well thought, it's really amazing!
Also, I really appreciate the fact that Leon is not only a bombshell (thought I liked the former version also), but also a menace, something deceptively beautiful but very dangerous (apparently, that's where you going), explaining the need for the solvereigns to dominate completely.

Please tell me you are going to update. I would be so sad if you gave up on this story. I loved the first rendition, and am falling in love with this one too. Hope to see you soon.

Tori_Chan

I apologize for riling you so on your livejournal. I try to be constructive in my criticisms when I review a story I really like, but I often have trouble articulating myself. What I originally critisized was really just that there was so little transition between the things that happened in this chapter. Right in the beginning, the dialogue switches into a detailed description of a ganado house, and though its written well, it leaves me as the reader feeling like I missed something. This also happens several times after the fic gets rolling, though the problem itself is what makes it hard to tell exactly where the kinks lie. Reading this chapter is somewhat reminiscent of a flashback in a video, with many images which are connected, but not smooth come one after another rapid-fire. The audience observes what is going on, but feels like floundering because so much information is being thrown at them. Now that I've read it again, I don't see any problem with it, since its really quite an immersive syle, and the little disclaimer at the top really helps to get the right mindset to comprehend what is going on. I really look forward to the next chapter; I can't wait to continue reading. Have a good holiday, and once again, sorry for causing you grief.

very happy to see ur updating and working with this story again, i was getting worried since its such an awesome story that its nice to see its being worked on. hope to see and update soon.

Wow. Just wow. I actually made an account just so I could review your story. Now that it comes to it, though, I don't have much to say. It's awesomely well-written, the plot itself is wonderful and I don't think I've ever been so sad to have the scroll bar hit bottom. I'm really looking forward to the next installment!

Please tell me you're working on part six that it will be up soon? I read you're first version of this story and I am finding this second one to be to much darker, yet not with out a disturbed beauty. The butterflies for example I think something in my head cracked and didn't line up right after reading that. I don't know if I will ever be able to look at them the same again. You're an amazing author, and it's well worth the some times long wait.

Wesker is a total bastard but honestly I can't wait to see what his next move is going to be. (Well that and he's bringing out the best of his new race to have fun.)

good(best) as usual and i love it



BUT - i have to point out - i hate the wings! it's like the ultimate littlefanfictiongirlwetdreamscliche. darksexyangelsomething.

your story, despite the whole "necessary freaky sexplaga thing" Xb, is build up and written in a very realistic and hard style. and i love that. the wings just ruins it. i mean, what comes next? - goblins and elfs?

don't get me wrong, it's your story and it is still damn good. i only hope, that it does not get too much fantasy-like.

Absolutely wonderful. It feels like it's been so long since the previous update and I look forward to the next. Keep up the amazing work and I can't wait for what happens next.