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person Arie
schedule March 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Although I walked into the fic skeptical as to how well it could actually be done, I was pleasantly surprised. I have to say that I really enjoyed the way you framed the events in your story, and I also liked the inclusion of some actual game dialogue. It felt that you were building on the frame rather than tearing it down and starting over, which I enjoyed. Although I never pictured a ganado having sex, it was a well done scene, both descriptive and pallatable. Also the scenes with Ashley were well done--I didn't feel like she was too casual after the incident by the way. All in all I was taken in by this and pretty much couldn't stop reading until I ran out of chapters. Kudos to you.
person WhiteSnake
schedule March 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OMFG SADDLER GOT PWNED!

WRITE MORE DAMMIT! *busts out chains and whip*
person Anna
schedule March 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wonderful writing! Please continue! Your story is filled with small details, and it actually made you feel that you were there. Please, please, please continue!
-Anna
person SammyB
schedule March 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very nicely done. To be your first male/male smut attempt, you did great. I enjoyed Leon's reaction towards the plaga and his new found information. This chapter was definently worth the wait and I'm so glad I finally got to read it. It was so gross what happens when Leon fully feeds off of someone, but I mean that as a compliment. The detail once again was wonderful and I would love to see an update soon. Great Job.
person MissSavage
schedule March 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Interesting fic... I like your characterization of Saddler. He gets a little talkative in the game and you captured that perfectly, as well as his attitude towards Americans. The only problems I found are a few grammar errors and Ashley and Leon seemed a little too casual with each other after just having sex. I won't judge too harshly on it though since there's more to the fic than just smut, which is a nice change. Nice work and update soon.

MissSavage
person bg
schedule March 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Great story, I really am enjoying it so far. The story is really enjoyable to read and your language use is exceptional. I think the story is fine with the graphical details but it is your story and I will definately read the rest when you post it. Thanks for your effort.
person REYaoi
schedule March 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Once again, I think you did an splendid job. I love the way you describe everything, it is very well detailed. The interaction between Leon and the plaga is very amusing and interesting. I like how you show things through the plaga's point of view and when Leon speaks to it. It's just a very good story and I hope to see an update soon. I don't mind you being "long winded" at all. I think that is what makes this story so good.
person Summerdreamer
schedule February 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is a very excellant story. I was riveted to it. I like how you made the parasites different in Leon. I hope to read more and I love how you did the whole story. Your really a great writer.
person SammyB
schedule February 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That chapter was wonderful. I really liked it. It's sucks that the next chapter is going to come so slow, but you're busy and I understand. Anyway, I love it when Leon gets his hunger pains going, it's just so neat to me for some reason. Once again, the chapter was great and I will be waiting for more! Good luck with everything.
person erobey
schedule February 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wow, i just started reading this! have gotten to chapter 4 and this is so intense! i really like the description of the auras and the 'need to feed'! very well put together and the visuals are wonderful. wish i did not have to go to work, but i will definitely be reading the remaing chapter after i'm off.