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I'm not all that much of an Ada fan, but right now I'll cheer her on just to get Leon out of Saddler's hands....even if it means he's going into the fire, the poor thing deserves a break, even if only a short one. I'm eagerly awaiting more. Keep it up!

First off I would like to say that your latest chapter is wonderful.

Second, I hope that you continue even in light of imature and ill thought out reviews of others. Although it does truly pain me to see such behavior in an area created for constructive and helpful reviews and opinions.

Even though now its seems that you have "dumb down" your story for others to read more effectivly, I would just like to ask that you leave some creative writing for myself to read. As greedy as that my sound, I find myself becoming slightly frustrated with the 'box' that writers and readers have started to create in the many facets of writing. Now, in no way am I a master of liturature, but I do enjoy reading almost everything . Besides, without creatvity there would probably never have been books, poems, and other forms of art. Not only that, but I realy enjoy finding a word I don't understand, reading is about learning and teaching. I feel that it is very important to be open minded while reading aswell, otherwise you would miss the subtle hints that show changes in a charcters devolopment, or perhaps forshadowing of the actual plot. I often find that enthralling stories are the ones that also demand an imagination, and your fanfiction seems to be delivering in spades.

I'm sorry if this seems more directed at Veil, Six Six Seven, Diamond, or the slightly hypocritcal defenders of your writing Mandy, and SammyB rather than you Maiafay. But without your artist licenses, I doubt this story would be as good or even worth reading.

I'm am really loving it so far and I hope that you will write more soon because I want to read what is going to happen next! What it Ada going to do? This is a good story so post more quickly because you have to because I need to read it... badly. Keep up the good work.

ohhh you're killin me i can't wait for the next chapter.... oh god i might die from anticipation... but take your time cuz you're a great writter and they need time...

Kick ASS~! Jeebus, I wish you would write more! You seem to like ending the chapters on cliff hangers! When I finish reading them I start to twitch because I want to read the next chapter SO bad!
Anyway,
God, those people that left those horrible reveiws are fucking morons!
Word of advice to anyone else that wants to leave stupid, arrogant comments like those: IF YOU DON'T LIKE THE STORY THEN DONT FUCKING READ IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Sorry about my language, people like those really piss me off and they need to keep their whiney little comments to themselves.
If you don't like what your reading, ya know, go write your own kinky, sex filled nonescence stories! And maybe when you do, arrogant people like you will leave dumb little comments on your story so you'll finally have a taste of what Maiyafai has been putting up with from you!
...jeese....
Well, I hope you write more buddy! Keep up the awesome writing!

*cries* Beautiful....just beautiful...The plot is fantastic! I love your writing style! Please update soon!
(Hi Lazuli! ^0^)

Excellent job I loved it. That is quite a cliff hanger though I can't wait to read more.

Summer

yay! Took me a while to see that you had actually updated- cause I thought there were already 11 chapters XD What solid smut XD Agh XD poor leon! Very well done- however :-D I thought it was hilarious (if a little... sad- when Leon was being abused- but I laughed a lot too) I'm so glad I started this story!!! XD

Agh- god- I can't wait till next chapter XD DEATH to ADA!!!

:-D Wonderfl job again ^_^

*cheers* Another glorious chapter! I love the way you've been treating Leon and Saddler, especially the fact that it takes time for Leon to be tammed.
So someone is gonna appear? Is it Krauser? I'm not sure if you killed him off (although Leon and Ashley DID get de-bugged) so that's why I'm wondering. Or is it gonna be Wesker? Oh hoho! Wesker and Slave!Leon, now that is an odd pairing.

But seriously...

Is it Krauser? o_0

The best way to sum up my review is by simply posting the conversation I had with my friend concerning the subject of this work, the people it has attracted, and how matters of constructive criticism are viewed. Sorry if it seems like a long yarn, but I figured it was the best way, like I said. And it is written in parentheses because it's OOC text in an AIM roleplay that I'm doing with a friend of mine.

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Ragnarok Albion: (*is reading these reviews* Just...wow.... -_-)
Ragnarok Albion: (Oh for God's sake, get over yourself, Maiafay. Forty-two reviews from two-bits who wouldn't know good writing if it smacked them in the face does not a good story make. Do you know how many people there are on this site who can't even structure a grammatically correct sentence? Please, step down from your high horse before you make me snort my prune juice. Veil writes an honest, albeit blunt, review of your story, giving constructive criticism AS REVIEWERS ARE SUPPOSED TO DO, and you blow a gascket. Oh, that's VERY mature. Yes, you're just the paragon of mature virtue! Honestly, there's nothing that gets me pissed more than a writer who can't take criticism without whining about it.

I've been on the sharp edge of Veil's criticism before, but you know what? She's honest, she points out what she thinks could be improved without dancing around, and sometimes she makes a really good point. Why don't you swallow your pride and look at what she said like a mature writer would do? At least give her criticism some consideration before you blow it out your ass.

Oh, and don't put words in peoples' mouths. Neither Veil nor Six Six Seven said they had any problem with slash or sex. Instead, they VERY CLEARLY stated EXACTLY THE OPPOSITE. Looks like you need to work on your reading comprehension skills, not just your writing.)
Ragnarok Albion: (I'm wondering if these last three big retards are the same person with three different s/ns -_-)
AshiHotaruGuru: (...actually...)
AshiHotaruGuru: (I have to agree with that one comment...)
AshiHotaruGuru: (The one you posted here.)
Ragnarok Albion: (hm? o.o)
AshiHotaruGuru: (The one you posted above)
AshiHotaruGuru: (Viel was just giving a constructive critizem)
AshiHotaruGuru: (If *I* found a story that was once interesting, then got dull so, I would comment about it.)
AshiHotaruGuru: (Same with Six Six Seven.
AshiHotaruGuru: (Because I could see myself in that position, where people get really pissed at me for merely being honist and critical)
AshiHotaruGuru: (I dont want to hurt Veil. I actually respect her for saying such a thing when everyone else was "OMGILOVEYOURFIC")
AshiHotaruGuru: (Sorry if that makes you mad.)
Ragnarok Albion: (well, not, but those three weren't speaking their constructive criticism...if any...in a digestible manner. They honestly seemed like an asshole trifecta about it to me.)
Ragnarok Albion: (oh, and how much of Rare Side Effects have you read? :O)
AshiHotaruGuru: (I havnt.)
AshiHotaruGuru: (I am just saying that their comments are...well, blunt and honest)
AshiHotaruGuru: (Even if I wasnt giving constructiv crit, I am very honest about things o_o)
AshiHotaruGuru: (Besides, if writers didnt want honesty/constructive crit, they should say so in a disclaimer or warnings or something..)
Ragnarok Albion: (well, in this case, I guess its just a matter of if the fanfiction's been read or not to really related to it. In my honest opinion after reading this from the first chapter up to the chapter that it's stopped at, I think this is well written. They seemed to be complaining about the fact that it was one big fuckfest full of big words that annoyed them. Oh, and she DID put the warnings in her disclaimers)
Ragnarok Albion: (for EVERY chapter o_o)
AshiHotaruGuru: (I mean o_o)
AshiHotaruGuru: (Warnings for NO CONSTRUCTIVE CRIT or something)
AshiHotaruGuru: (because there are a lot of people who really hate getting it)
Ragnarok Albion: (She didn't warn against constructive criticism o_o)
Ragnarok Albion: (but again, this is a matter of having read Maiafay's work to begin with)
Ragnarok Albion: (but yeah, what was I saying? o.o Oh yeah, the manners of giving criticism o.o)
Ragnarok Albion: (But... *smacks head* Yeah @@ You can be blunt, but the way Veil did it wasn't in a way that would make the author feel that it was helpful in any way at all o_o)
Ragnarok Albion: (I mean, did you read what she said? It was loaded with spite o_o;;)
Ragnarok Albion: (Giving spitefully driven constructive criticism isn't even considered criticism by most people, it's considered being a large reeking asshole o_o Now, if you're just emotionless and still blunt, that tends to hurt a persons feelings, but they might take it, and then there's the more nice "Hey, I have a suggestion that could help..." kind of criticism, which istends to be more well taken, unless the person's a complete whino, then none of those tactics will work)
Ragnarok Albion: (what I'm trying to say on that though, is that if you ask for constructive criticism, whether for art, music, whatever, it tends mean, "I want you to help me with things that apply to my story in a nice manner. Because being rude to me when I don't even know you is bullshit and I don't appreicate it.")
Ragnarok Albion: (*gnars* So before I go on a yarn, yeah, these three were being unnecessary asses about the whole thing and after following and reading the whole thing, I think their all just being a lot of spiteful and narrowminded fools... *gnargnar*)
Ragnarok Albion: (Okay, I'm done @_@)

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Yeah, like I said, I'm done with that yarn. But, to show my supportiveness for this work, after having actually read through it, I think this is a beautifully written work and the pacing is perfect. Obviously there are others who want this to be some kind of fast-paced maelstrom of angst, sex, and violence, but they seemed to have failed to realize that this what you're going for and suddenly bending to their will and instering that into your fanfiction all of a sudden would fuck everything up the wazoo. A slow and meandering pacing is ideal for such detailing of the intense stress and internal conflict thats battering Leon. HE is the important one here, so HE is the focus of these issues, so the story will revolve with a slower pacing than some might like around HIM, unless the author choses to shift her focus to another characters woes if they're planned to be a key factor in the progression of the story.

Like you've pretty much said yourself, Maiafay(whether directly or not), the main three that have aggrivated you can get over themselves, buy a dictionary if they have a poor vocabulary, hit the back button, and GET OVER IT. If you want a fic to go your seperate(or singular and omnipresent) way, then write your own damn story. If someone vents all over your asses as you've done this author for no LOGICAL reason, I'll be vastly amused by the irony. But now I'm just getting spiteful with that note.

Maiafay, I honestly don't think you should let all this foolishness make you bend and lower yourself down to a lower tier of intelligence just to appease whoever complains. If their stupid, then let them revel in their blissful idiocy. Those of us with braincells that we are well aware of and fully capable of using enjoy your fanfiction just the way it is and don't think it needs to be changed.(though, I'll point out that you frequently type "currant" instead of "current" and seeing the first term brings to mind "currant", the fruit, instead of "current", the word. but that's just a little quirk that gets at me. Its nothing major). Don't let all of this wear away at your integrity, I hate seeing flaming morons tearing down a good author like a bunch of wolves.

I support you all the way, and I await the next entries to what is proving to be quite a dramatic conclusion. Sorry for this massive and needless yarn. I just had to get it off of my chest. Good luck to you!

~Lazuli