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June 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I can't decide if I should start screaming and ripping my hair out or trying to figure out someway to marry you :)
Yes you are evil and the mental image of Wesker having his wicked, unique 'Wesker' way with Leon is really curious. But as I was reading, it says that Krauser's still kicking around so I started to wonder. Also you're dream sequence's are extreamly cruel and evil (YAY! for aura's).
I'm so gobsmacked I can't think properly. All I know is that tonight, Wesker's gonna be dancing in my head lol!
Sadly though, Hunk isn't a piece of Tofu. *sighs*
Nice picture! Can't wait to see Leon's! >:}
Yes you are evil and the mental image of Wesker having his wicked, unique 'Wesker' way with Leon is really curious. But as I was reading, it says that Krauser's still kicking around so I started to wonder. Also you're dream sequence's are extreamly cruel and evil (YAY! for aura's).
I'm so gobsmacked I can't think properly. All I know is that tonight, Wesker's gonna be dancing in my head lol!
Sadly though, Hunk isn't a piece of Tofu. *sighs*
Nice picture! Can't wait to see Leon's! >:}
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June 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Another great job can't wait to read more.
Summer
Summer
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June 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
holy shit...I love this story! It's so elabourate. Everything has a meaning and purpose. Characters are well represented and depected. I really dont want this to end. I would love to know when the next chapter is coming as I really want to see the outcome. Damn this is really really really amazing!
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June 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I reviewed when I was still glowing over the story, so I'll elaborate. I think you did a really good job in characterizations, and you really seem to know your resident evil, which is a relief, because ALOT of videogame fictions are so OFF. And yes, there is alot of sex - but that's what you wanted to write, and frankly I enjoyed it (Throughout the game I had been dying to see just a snip of saddler/leon indicated, heh). I think your plaga backstory is REALLY interesting too, and this entire story is original. Alot of times originally written fiction deters people, because they like to see the same plots over and over again - but I thought it was really refreshing. I look forward to the end, and especially wesker/leon!
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June 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I just barely saw that you updated again. Great job I can't wait to read more. Keep up the excellent work.
Summer
Summer
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June 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
VERY hot
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June 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Reviewing 2 chapters here so I’m splitting them up and beware, it’s a lengthy review!
Chapter 9:Part 3 review- I really can’t stand Saddler anymore. Though I like how you portray him. He is so haughty and I can’t stand how he always talks down on everyone. I could see him putting all the blame on Leon for not being able to accommodate him. Well, Leon’s struggling and tensing didn’t make it easy, but it’s not like it would be regardless of that. His reaction to that just really irked me and he needs another swift kick to the balls for it. : )
The choking scene was well detailed, I felt so bad for Leon and yet, I was amused. I know I’m bad. Anyway, this chapter got me to thinking of Saddler to be more of a living drug to Leon. At first, I saw the soul bonding as a forced love thing and I’m starting to see it differently. I could be way off, but I don’t think Leon loves him as Saddler thinks he will. Whether Saddler thinks it’s forced love or not. For Leon, I see it, as not that he loves him by force, but more like a forced need and craving. Kind of like a drug addiction. He hates it, but at the same time he needs it. The energy that Saddler has is what Leon wants, not Saddler in my opinion. Even if he is bonded to Saddler, I think it has little to do with him. I’m thinking it was the same with Telegren. (I might have spelt that wrong, I can’t remember.) Saddler just likes to think its love for him more than the need to feed.
I liked how you went about showing what it was like during the soul bonding and when Leon feed off him. That scene was appealing and inventive. I enjoy the fact that even after the Soul bonding, Leon may unwillingly and physically be forced to co-operate with Saddler, but mentally he still holds the rebellion and hate for him. I know I state how you do with the character personalities a lot, but I think its important to let the writer know if they are or aren’t slipping in that area. Though it’s hard with a story like this, because you are going to have to put them in situations that will make them out of character, but you seem to stem how they would react from their set character traits. Making, to me, see them to be in character at the same time. I can see certain characters acting the way you portray them in such situations.
Nice way of bringing in Ada. She’s always popping up out of nowhere. I could see her doing that, appearing so suddenly. Makes you wonder what she’s been up to, which with Ada it can be both good and bad things.
So yes, great job with this chapter.
Chapter 10: I don’t know why, but this has become my favorite chapter. I don’t know what it is but I really enjoyed it. The character interactions were entertaining and informative as well. I liked the peek inside of Ada’s head, it really did her character justice. Oh in her and Wesker’s relationship was a good twist. Leon’s reaction was great.
The scene between Ashley and Ada was entertaining. Though, I didn’t expect to have Ashley win and I’m glad you didn’t do that. Sometimes, when people like one character over the other they tend to give that character outstanding and ridiculous qualities. Making a character defeat another who is actually more skilled and stronger, more likely to win. So props to not playing favorites in your story, it’s obvious you don’t with how Leon gets taunted and kicked around a lot.
Ada was played off as I thought she was. She has inner turmoil, but in the end, she can be quite the cold-hearted bitch. Choke a girl and put Leon through so much pain. Sure she had a bit of regret, but she was pretty much a bitch about it. I always saw Ada to be a business first type character and she comes off that way in the story. How she is so easily turning Leon over to them. Careless about what happens to Ashley, yet I think she does have some concern for Leon.
I like how you introduced Sherry through Ada and Wesker as well. Sherry being a woman in a child’s body, which makes a good twist. I’m sure that really does mess with her head. It can’t be easy for Ada having to be around her and it actually helps Ada seem less of a bad person, but she is still far from good.
Leon was extremely amusing in this chapter; I loved how he got back at Ada and her reaction to it. She was obviously freaked out by it. I can’t wait to see Wesker and Sherry’s appearance. Leon’s reaction to them.
I just enjoyed the interaction between everyone. The view into their minds and how they worked.
Though Leon had and is having a rough time with Saddler’s death or at least I think he’s dead, you never know, I’m glad he’s out of the picture. It was somewhat morbidly sweet when he shoved Leon out of the way, but I also so it as just another way of helping himself. It was kind of for him just as much as it was for Leon. So I still hate him!!
Wow, this is too long. Okay, both chapters were great in my opinion. I think you did an excellent job with everything. The flow of it is good and it doesn’t get confusing when switching from one point to another. This chapter in particular leaves me wanting to know more and wanting to poke you in the ribs repeatedly until I get to read the next one. Hehe. I am looking forward to part 2 and best of luck with writing it. Take care!
Chapter 9:Part 3 review- I really can’t stand Saddler anymore. Though I like how you portray him. He is so haughty and I can’t stand how he always talks down on everyone. I could see him putting all the blame on Leon for not being able to accommodate him. Well, Leon’s struggling and tensing didn’t make it easy, but it’s not like it would be regardless of that. His reaction to that just really irked me and he needs another swift kick to the balls for it. : )
The choking scene was well detailed, I felt so bad for Leon and yet, I was amused. I know I’m bad. Anyway, this chapter got me to thinking of Saddler to be more of a living drug to Leon. At first, I saw the soul bonding as a forced love thing and I’m starting to see it differently. I could be way off, but I don’t think Leon loves him as Saddler thinks he will. Whether Saddler thinks it’s forced love or not. For Leon, I see it, as not that he loves him by force, but more like a forced need and craving. Kind of like a drug addiction. He hates it, but at the same time he needs it. The energy that Saddler has is what Leon wants, not Saddler in my opinion. Even if he is bonded to Saddler, I think it has little to do with him. I’m thinking it was the same with Telegren. (I might have spelt that wrong, I can’t remember.) Saddler just likes to think its love for him more than the need to feed.
I liked how you went about showing what it was like during the soul bonding and when Leon feed off him. That scene was appealing and inventive. I enjoy the fact that even after the Soul bonding, Leon may unwillingly and physically be forced to co-operate with Saddler, but mentally he still holds the rebellion and hate for him. I know I state how you do with the character personalities a lot, but I think its important to let the writer know if they are or aren’t slipping in that area. Though it’s hard with a story like this, because you are going to have to put them in situations that will make them out of character, but you seem to stem how they would react from their set character traits. Making, to me, see them to be in character at the same time. I can see certain characters acting the way you portray them in such situations.
Nice way of bringing in Ada. She’s always popping up out of nowhere. I could see her doing that, appearing so suddenly. Makes you wonder what she’s been up to, which with Ada it can be both good and bad things.
So yes, great job with this chapter.
Chapter 10: I don’t know why, but this has become my favorite chapter. I don’t know what it is but I really enjoyed it. The character interactions were entertaining and informative as well. I liked the peek inside of Ada’s head, it really did her character justice. Oh in her and Wesker’s relationship was a good twist. Leon’s reaction was great.
The scene between Ashley and Ada was entertaining. Though, I didn’t expect to have Ashley win and I’m glad you didn’t do that. Sometimes, when people like one character over the other they tend to give that character outstanding and ridiculous qualities. Making a character defeat another who is actually more skilled and stronger, more likely to win. So props to not playing favorites in your story, it’s obvious you don’t with how Leon gets taunted and kicked around a lot.
Ada was played off as I thought she was. She has inner turmoil, but in the end, she can be quite the cold-hearted bitch. Choke a girl and put Leon through so much pain. Sure she had a bit of regret, but she was pretty much a bitch about it. I always saw Ada to be a business first type character and she comes off that way in the story. How she is so easily turning Leon over to them. Careless about what happens to Ashley, yet I think she does have some concern for Leon.
I like how you introduced Sherry through Ada and Wesker as well. Sherry being a woman in a child’s body, which makes a good twist. I’m sure that really does mess with her head. It can’t be easy for Ada having to be around her and it actually helps Ada seem less of a bad person, but she is still far from good.
Leon was extremely amusing in this chapter; I loved how he got back at Ada and her reaction to it. She was obviously freaked out by it. I can’t wait to see Wesker and Sherry’s appearance. Leon’s reaction to them.
I just enjoyed the interaction between everyone. The view into their minds and how they worked.
Though Leon had and is having a rough time with Saddler’s death or at least I think he’s dead, you never know, I’m glad he’s out of the picture. It was somewhat morbidly sweet when he shoved Leon out of the way, but I also so it as just another way of helping himself. It was kind of for him just as much as it was for Leon. So I still hate him!!
Wow, this is too long. Okay, both chapters were great in my opinion. I think you did an excellent job with everything. The flow of it is good and it doesn’t get confusing when switching from one point to another. This chapter in particular leaves me wanting to know more and wanting to poke you in the ribs repeatedly until I get to read the next one. Hehe. I am looking forward to part 2 and best of luck with writing it. Take care!
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June 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Woohoo! you updated! I really liked this chapter. It answered quite a few questions on Aida's views, and personally, I thought you did a good job of exploring her rather vague motivations for working for Wesker in the game. I also like the twist you have with Sherry. What I wonder is will she be able to read Leon's thoughts, or will his mutation somehow prevent her from reading his mind, or allow her only to see his emotions. Because the story could go completely differently based on what means Wesker has available to get information out out Leon. Well, hope to see another u update soon! keep up the good work!
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June 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hi! I just thought that seeing as I've read this ficcy from the very beginning and haven't said anything, I thought I'd mention just how much I LOVE this fic! It's great! All the ideas on the plaga hierarchy, the development of the plaga-enduced feelings and the other characters interaction with the 'new' Leon are all really well thought out and I only wish could write as well as you do. Leon is my favourite character out of all the Resi Evil guys and girls and I think you've done a great job of keeping him in character throughout his trauma and I can't wait for the next chapter! Keep up the great work!
L.C
L.C
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May 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
LOVE! Complete and utter love! I love this story, I love you, marry me? Aside from that, I thought that Wesker would also be a Sovereign more or less because of his yellow eyes(ignoring the fact that he's mutated and the such). Added with that I adore how you have Leon confronting Ada about everything and it is true, she did keep leaving him behind again and again in RE2. You've connected everything with such taste and wonders! In the end I'm sad that Saddler died(bond mates and all that) but I can't wait for Wesker to get his hands on Leon *insane grin*.