rate_review Reviews

What´z Up! are you going to continue? im really looking forward to read the next Chapter! really girl!!!
your writting is really good, you put a lot of effort in the writting, you´re pretty good really,
and to tell you the truth when i review i´ve always review critics...
and these is really good... the only thing you´ve to change is that you´ve to make the chapters Longer...
and please put some sex on the history, that would make it perfect... the way you end the last chapter is perfect to continue it
with some bed time.. you know.. like sex, oral, anal, solo and more.. XD... and don´t be afraid about my review xD i just LOVE male Sex
and more with this characters... cuz it´s really hard to find a good fic ´bout them... and yours IS REALLY GOOD!
SO PLEASE I BEG YOU!! CONTINUE CUZ IT PASSED ALOT OF TIME AND YOU HAVEN´T CONTINUED.. SO CONTINUE AND PUT SOME SEX!!!!!!!!

spanking..... ooh my god! THAT WAS SEXY!! XDD!! heey!! you MUST continue XD
i love that pairing *had a orgasm* ejem.. well.. please continue this fanfic and put more kinky situation.. and more yaoi.. i really wanna see those two in the same bed having fun xD... and i´ll tell it again I LOVE THE SPANKING PART XD!! put more things like this.. sexy yaoi things... you know.. XD and please continue!! cuz i can´t wait to read the next part xD

wooow!!
i LOVE this fic
i hope you´ll continue soon
PLEASE!! continue this ASAP!!!!

you write pretty well and i love the way you write Albel´s personality
PLEASE!! continue!!

Refering to eyeballs as hues and orbs is one of the most vile sins a writer can commit, you terrible person you. It may seem pretty but it just gets annoying. Also, your sentences don't make as much sense as they should. I suggest you get yourself a sensible beta reader, and if you already have one get different one.

*Dies of laughter* Love it! I can't wait to see the next chapter!!

Mm. Spanking.

Weird, but I like it. Can't wait to see the next chapter

Well that was really good. I still have to read the other chapters, but it's late, I'm sick, and my head is fuzzy. I have to say that this fiction is very well written. Loads of simillies... (Did I spell that right?) and metaphors, and a touch of hilarious quirky humour make it a dream! Usually so much of such things can make something confusing, or even boring, but if this was a novel, I'd call it a page-turner! I was interested the whole way through. I can't wait to read the rest.

~Chlover~

well I barely started playing the game so I am a little confused at what's going on X_x but I still like the story and I hope you update soon...cause I'm addicted now @.@

Ahhhhhh...I don't know if it was your elaborate writing or my small brain, but I didn't understand about half of what was going on in the first chapter. ...ahhhhh, it must be my small brain. Big words confuse me. Well, pretty good story, though. ......man, I've gotta read the dictonary more often.