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Oh man! I'm sure you have already gotten plent of these emails, but still! You have NO idea how joyful it made me to see you updated the fic! I freaked out when I lost your website, and then AFF decided to move around, I had to hunt down this fic three times! But, it was worth it ten fold and then some! I can't wait for more, and I'm even going to get four hours of sleep because I HAVE to read the next chapter. Thanks for the WONDERFUL fiction! Although, I think I might have a heart attack if up update City of Dying Dreams. >3
WITH MUCH MUCH LOVE!
Lita!

I've read all of this in one sitting... I've gotta say you've got your characters down so well. Ohhh Sora is such a brave, bold little Uke. I feel so sorry for Riku though, the situation is way over his head, and he doesn't even know it. I have a feeling in my gut that he's gonna be the one to die. It seems that *most* of what Squall sees in Sora gives him more lust than love. Sora fell for Squall in the first place because of his looks, though Riku, even with his tough asshole-popularity-i-dont-give-a-fuck shell, really has true love for Sora. Its all this shit that he's grown up with - the whole ideal about keeping his rep up and things always going his way ("The Great Riku") thats keeping him from expressing whats deep within his heart, the true sincerity he has for Sora. He's being restrained to the point that he doesn't have time for Sora, all because of the lifestyle he has been driving. I feel that Riku deserves Sora simply because his love for Sora is pure (well no shit it isn't ALL pure, Sora is a piece of hot fucking ass that I'd rape and wouldn't mind being sent to jail for XD [not in RL though, hell no]) while Squall has been lonely most of his life, and Sora, someone who happened to need someone to grant him security, came along and fell in love with him. I have a feeling Riku will ultimately make a sacrifice that will flip the tables on the seeming onesided SquallSora relationship. I don't know what, but its a feeling in my gut. I don't think Riku's gotten enough attention throughout the story, and I really feel bad for him. He thinks he still has hope with Sora, though Sora has already fallen for Squall.

I'd really prefer it if Riku wasn't overlooked too much, because it doesn't seem like you like him at all, lol. I'd really like it if he had a greater impact on his relationship with Sora. I DO HOPE that you balance it out so that Sora thinks Riku ALOT better than he has at the end of the story, because it wouldn't be much of a "love triangle" if you focused too much on SquallSora Rabbitloving/fluff. I know I know it seems Riku doesn't deserve Sora for all the thigns hes done, like having sex with alot of people, but like I said, I think that it lies within his true feelings, deep within his concious, his heart, that he has feelings for Sora, not to mention a history with Sora, that Squall will never, ever have.

Please tell me what you think of my review XD

I just sat up for 4 hours straight reading this whole story, and I must say, I LOVE IT!!! You're story is written so eloquently well, and it offers a great amount of drama, and at the same time, an actual plot! Overall, this story is amazing, and I can't wait until you update. Also, Maggie Moo's and Otakon?? Sounds like you are from the Pennsylvania/ Maryland area. :D

I WILL admit, this idea is very common in the world of fanfiction, but I can already tell there are going to be many twists and changes that go on, that, and it may not be a happy ending, which, by itself, makes me want to read this fiction from beginning to end :D The key to keeping this fic interesting from others it to keep throwing new characters into the plot. Many "Triangle" fics I guess they're called get old because they only revolve around the two relationships going on (3 people) and their clashing. Now, thats the main part of the story, but some authors focus too much on the clashing, and not too much of the side. They end up only the camera switch from one side to the other, with the eventual uneventful end. Add in some flavorful characters and personalities, hell even twists (another person tries to intervene in the triangle as an example) that will have some type of effect on the plot so it doesn't just go from I love him, to omg he loves him he doesnt love me, to but i love him too but i love this guy, to omg he loves him, to wtf is going on i just want to fuck both of you. Hell, maybe even some conspiracies that plan to break the relationship (Romeo and Juliet style for example) and set certain characters apart. "Tale of Two Cities" had 3 characters, 2 characters falling in love with the same character, one showing his love, and one feeling sorry for himself because he doesn't think she deserves his love. In the end though, that person saved her life, even though the other person had her love. Sorry if i'm not being clear, lol. Flavor is key if you're going for a common theme, but TBH there aren't really alot of themes that aren't overused in Romance, simply because there aren't alot of viable endings other than "they lived happily ever after" or "they don't live happily ever after" What changes it is what the author put in the middle of the story to make it end up that way that makes it awesome.

Well, theres my 2 cents, hopefully I helped out a little bit. Good luck on your story, and I can't wait for more!

(Btw, I'm assuming you copy-pasted this story from your FF.net Document, so you're going to put teh juicy scenes here right? XD)

LOL! I just noticed you already had several chapters written, I thought you only had 1 XD Oh well, hopefully my advice will help you further your story anyway, well if you'll excuse me, i'll go read the other chapters now!

..... *sniffle* ... I didn't find a next chapter button.. and i SOOO not liek you for not having a next chapter button.. you btter finish this story *niffles* Or I'm gonan be a mad fangirl..

...hey!

You can review without an account... cool...

(sorry, I'm quite dumb at times.)

Just dropping a review to tell you how amazing (not to mention absolutely delicious) this story is. It's the first AU I've read in an extreamly long time, but I enjoy it, none the less. I went through 17 in chapters in 3 days, if that means anything to you...

Keep up the phenominal work!

Okay - I have not been to sleep in over 48 hours, I had a horrible test run this morning that gave me a migraine and I still sat here all day staring at the computer screen reading this story. If you don't update it soon all my pain will be in vain! (Sorry, sleep deprivation brings out the rhyming devil to prance and play)

I love your writing style BTW. I couldn't stop reading this absolutely delicious story. Thank you so much for capturing my interest and making me want to delve into the realm of Kingdom Hearts once again. *claps hands with malicious glee*

Thank you so much for updating it just made the year 2007 so much better. Love the long chapter filled with angst yet humor. and extra brownie points for sexy uke Sora in the end of the chapter. and i really enjoy the A/N when Squall and Riku agrue, but will they have a real serious conflict later on in the next chapter? Thank you for updating again and keep up with the good work.

*raises hand calmly* I volenteer to babysit those two....lol boy do I ever. That'd be a fun night for a the blushing sexually fristrated virgin *coughs* er....yeah ^_^;;;; lol. I hope you update soon. I was just waiting...waiting for soemoen to walk in on squall and sora and fuck everything up...maybe next time. Im prone to drama. It makes me laugh ^_^. *waves to riku* if you ever get tired of trying to bonk Sora you can come and visit me.....

non marrigage related sex....eternal damnation for one night with Riku seems fair right? I thought so.

Laters
~Menou~