rate_review Reviews

CUTE! Ohmygawd that's sooo cute. You should definitely write more Torn/Jak *nods to emphasize* But watch your grammar a bit *winks* some words aren't correct. Keep up the good work!

I LIKED YOUR STORY A LOT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

~GMB~

I loved it soo much. You are an awsome author!

Got to love the slashy Jak/Torn goodness...

This was indeed a very fun idea and it turned out well so no reason to hate it. It was hot and exciting, although I think that it got a little too mushy in the end. Might be just me, though. I don't do mushy/fluffy/sweet...

Keep writing and we'll keep reading. :)

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woot!
torn got some!
I like this pair alot you should write more!
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Oh, God, I was WAITING for somebody to use this idea! just...the was he _said_ it, man--"You can be _my_ getaway driver _anytime_, Jak." it sounded *exactly* like cheesy fanfiction. I'm glad somebody made a reasonably good story out of it.
I've been checking out Jak_yaoi, and I noticed you've posted there. This fic is a little sloppy, but I think you should put it up in the community and add to the sadly small repertoire of pr0n. If you polish it a little, and give Torn a little more of a "Fuck you, ottsel" attitude, than this fic would be really great.

You shouldn't hate it. I mean, I'm a dedicated Jak/Daxter fan and I still enjoyed this one, because it was hot and steamy but maintained enough of the original characterisation to be honest to the game.

I like Daxter's pushy questions, making sure that Torn isn't going to hurt Jak. And Jak is very vulnerable in this, I do like that. I think even Jak needs to beb vulnerable sometimes.

So, don't hate it. It's good. It's hot and smutty, which was at least some of the aim I assume, and it's a nice piece.

wow very nice job! hmmm can't wait to read moreur work of your work. could you make a sequal to this?

^_^ I love it! There are a few grammer mistakes, but no one's perfect. I love the idea lots! I'm so happy you decided to write another fic!