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Don't worry your little heads over this story, Smiley has more plans in mind- its just a matter of getting him to do it.^_^

That was a truly touching story, the ending was very saddening. It made me shed a tear. This story is by far one of the best written ones on Adult Fanfiction.net. It does an excellent job of creating an atmosphere of helplessness, and of how everything could've been changed if Ridley just simply told Samus his news first. One simple thing changed could have made their story end up with a much happier ending. You are a very talented writer, you know how to create just the right atmosphere with mere words, to make the reader feel just like the characters in the story feel, and you use just the right words to help the reader visualize what is going on, that is a rare talent among readers. On a final note, I ask you, can you please, if it's not too much trouble, create an alternate story, one where Ridley did tell Samus his news first? I believe an alternate story to this work of art would really put the whole "one simple thing can change your life forever" thing into retrospect. It would also might make the people who read this piece, and were dissapointed witht the sad ending, happier. Can you please consider this suggestion? Thank you, and good luck with any future pieces you may write for this site.

-The Damned

OH MY GOD. OH MY FUCKING GOD. This was... so good.
I cried at the end. You are incredibly talented, who the hell cares if it didnt follow the metroid story.
This deserves an award or somthing.

damn.....
I haven't cried this much since Saving Private Ryan.
absolutetly brilliant work

That was amazing, I loved it. It was extreamly sad and dark but it was just incredible. I'm a decent writer and I dont think in a hundred years I could write something that good. Write more storys please, the world needs people who like to read storys like this.

Wow...

This is a.....FUCKING MASTERPIECE!!!
You really kicked ass in writing this fic!
I hope you make more metroid fanfics like this with Ridley and Samus!
I love it! I'm definitely putting this in my bookmark!

.......For as long as I live, I will hunt you down and force you to make an alterante story, one where some one, ANYONE, shows up, and kills the bastard before he can rape Samus. Preferably me. I will fucking kill you, for that ending has stuck with me for days now. I did not cry, though I wanted to, when Samus died. You MUST write another story featuring Samus and Ridley. If not, I will let rabbid weasles eat your eyes.