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September 6, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Good lord, I've never seen a fic so full of absolutely nothing. She wakes up, she goes to sleep, she wakes up, she thinks, she's naked, she thinks, she sleeps, she wakes up, she thinks, she talks a bit. Make your chapters longer and for God's sake make something HAPPEN. Instrospection is fine when it's used to suppliment an action of some kind. There is no action in this fic whatsoever. Work a little bit on that.