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for Kristiana

by Keysheen

person Maiafay
schedule November 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Not sure if you'll ever see this review, since this is a old story. It strangely....flows. Granted, some of it's disurbing in that apathetic way...a litte detached. Yet, flowy. For some reason this boggles my mind. I think with the right plotline and less self insertion...you could really make a decent story. However, this one is a little...odd. Perhaps revise?