rate_review Reviews

I loved it! Cute, lovely, a well written piece. But it was too short... Add more chapters, please.

Not too Bad, the First Decent Issac/Mia Lemon I've seen in a while, Keep up the good work


Omega

Yeah, I plan on re-writing it, and getting more in depth, as well as adding chapters and such, so things get explained...I wrote this up quickly, didn't even double check it for spelling errors, someone had requested it since I had extensive writing skills; I roleplay in my spare time. I'll go ahead and make an update sooner or later, yes.

...I forgot. Yeah, the Doom Dragon WAS faced in TLA, though I get confused after a while...Since I actually haven't picked up my games in a while.

Not bad. Not the best in the world, but not bad. The general idea is conveyed, but more lenght and description is needed, and some serious sentence reworking is needed. Towards the intro, there was one sentence that was holding enough info and content for five sentences, seven if you added more info.

Again, not the worst in the world, and easily better than my Isaac/Sheba work. But it still needs some more work.

Nice idea having this take place after the first game, though. Just remember this - it was the FUSION Dragon that they fought on the V aer aerie. Doom Dragon was fought at Mars Lighthouse...

And who did Mia loose her virginity to? Twould be interesting to see how you explain that...

MIKAA

True, it does need a lot. But I was asked to make out something quick; I came up with this. Normally, I get so descriptive people get tired of reading.