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October 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
... >_>. What the hell was that? That was a joke... right? <_<. There are other words than "penis" you know.. my god ._.;;. The entire thing was just.. yeah... out of character, and creepy, and the "lemon" was a paragraph long. Sonic is like.. hardcore pedofile in this O_o. I mean.. I guess its AFF.net... and theres a lot of PWP going on, but geez... when its as unreasonable like this x.x. Only thing that seemed even like a rationalization was "Wow Tails, no wonder we get along so good!". Erm.. yeah.
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August 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Good story but it was very short and also i would very much apreciate an update.
sincerly,
Mr.D
sincerly,
Mr.D
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June 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hahaha gotta love bathroom sex...maybe a golden shower next time ?
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October 15, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Well, I must say it's a good short story. Remember that you need to start a new line for each new speaker though, because I don't think you did. However, despite that I enjoyed the story a lot, probably one of your best ones I've read so far to be perfectly honest. Well, keep on writing and good luck with all your further work!
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October 14, 2004 at 12:00 AM
hmmm twisted romance goodness cant wait to see more of your work
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April 18, 0000 at 12:00 AM
I've read your story before I think. Did you publish it at some other site? (can't remember where I saw it)
It is dark, but I like that you use the predjudice theme. As long as we don't have scenes like this every other chapter
I can handle it.
I just wanted to mention I like your general writing style. You manage to grab the imagination and pull people into the story.
I thought you were going to have Hermione check the marauders map, and see if she saw any suspicious movements.
She must be suspecting that Draco is the culprit. I was just wondering if Crabbe and Goyle would spill the beans
Not by just blurting out the truth, but you did show they were somewhat horrified by what happened. And they are both too
thick and stupid to hide their feelings.
I would expect Pansy to feel extra ashamed of the fact that it was Hermione and Ginny who found her of all people.
So if there is any "development" between Ron and Pansy, it would be after quite a bit of strife and trouble.
I'm looking forward to seeing where you will take the story next.
It is dark, but I like that you use the predjudice theme. As long as we don't have scenes like this every other chapter
I can handle it.
I just wanted to mention I like your general writing style. You manage to grab the imagination and pull people into the story.
I thought you were going to have Hermione check the marauders map, and see if she saw any suspicious movements.
She must be suspecting that Draco is the culprit. I was just wondering if Crabbe and Goyle would spill the beans
Not by just blurting out the truth, but you did show they were somewhat horrified by what happened. And they are both too
thick and stupid to hide their feelings.
I would expect Pansy to feel extra ashamed of the fact that it was Hermione and Ginny who found her of all people.
So if there is any "development" between Ron and Pansy, it would be after quite a bit of strife and trouble.
I'm looking forward to seeing where you will take the story next.
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April 18, 0000 at 12:00 AM
u totally rock! everytime i see u updated a story, i immediately rush to read it with excitement, and not ONCE have u let me down! its always amazing! this shows how truly of a excellent writer u r! i hope u keep the good work up! actually, i KNOW u will!! luv this story! and please update present too! thank u!