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You are one of the best writers at writeing orgies and you do great money shots too

Hey man it's so great to see this get updated. Very good indeed The stuff with Yumi and Lilly was really hot even if I'm not really into dickgirl stuff but you made it just to good not to like. However I think I found a minor error right after Yumi cum from Lilly's bj right after Lilly said she should had remove her outfit.*"Although maybe I should have taken the clothes off," she mused, and then took her mouth to Lilly's still slightly twitching penis, dripping the last of its load unto Lilly's thighs"* It should had said Yumi's twitching penis instead of Lillys.

There was some good humor in it like the part where the other gang is eating also the 1st. scene was funny too. You have also made Iku & Lucia so damn sexy Lucia is not that shocking she just oozes sex appeal but I would have never think of Iku that way you have made me see her in a whole new light. Geddoe and Nei was great too.

I must say that it seems as if you have got some of your spark back, it just show it seem as if you was really enjoying writing it. I'm really looking forward to next update I'm really hoping for some Hugo/Lucia & Hugo/Chris maybe it could be her way of apologizing for killing Lulu. Hell if we are really lucky we might get to see a threesome with Hugo/Lucia/Chris. also Lucia and Lilly would be good too as would Lilly/Chris. Sorry I got a little carry away there so many great possibilities. Keep up the great work I can't to read more I just hope we don't have wait as long this time. thanks again

it's very good to see this get a new chapter thanks

Hehe, Jace, some of the positions might be familiar indeed. Thanks for the inspiration!

I somehow managed to pick up some of the old flair during the last part of chapter 3, so writing it was indeed enjoyable.

Also, don't worry, I don't intend to take until to fall 2007 with chapter 4! There seem to be a lot of things competing for my time and attention even still, but after this brief pause, it seems that writing has made it back into that company as well.

Thank you too for the insightful review, Jeanes! That thing with Hallec sitting, I actually realized it too, and that's why I put the mention of it in at the first place, but looking back at it, I agree that it comes a bit late. I fixed it and it does work better now.

That gigantic mural idea that you mentioned about Jace's picture was interesting too...

Great!! Finally some new suikoden reading! Another awesome chapter, yet I hope to see a new one soon!! The Yumi/Lilly pairing is my fave! You've been quiet for a while but this proves your comeback! yay!!

Right on!!
I'm very surprised and happy to see a complete third chapter, hope you enjoyed writing it!
The story is coming along really well and the Yumi/Lilly pairing is indeed interesting,
though as you know my money is on the Iku/Franz/Hugo scene. Speaking of which,
I think I recognize some of their positions from somewhere. should I?
The build up between Chris & Hallec is very nice.. and hot, as was the one between Nei & Geddoe.
I wasn't expecting the people from the previous chapter to recover so soon, but for some reason
I'm not entirely surprised. Though, you gotta wonder where there's room for Augustine and Percival..

I took some time and refined a pic for your story as I wasn't completely satisfied with the previous version.
If you want to, you can might as well edit my review and post the image at the wetter margin and direct people there.
http://jace.125mb.com/sunny/SunnyDay.jpg

I really hope we don't have to wait as long for a fourth chapter, yet this was still worth the wait.
Thanks for the update and keep writing pal!
/jaCE

Very good... very hott as usual.

I loved Chris and Hallec though I wish there was more. I particularly enjoyed the image of him holding her upside down while they tasted each other. A little confusing as my first reaction to your description is that he must be standing up but later you say he's still sitting. Not really a problem.

I liked that you had Lucia come in and watch Lilly and Yumi...the little interplay between them.

I'm glad you put that part about Hugo's reaction to seeing his mother and that he's fantasizing about her even while getting sucked by Iku. Again I want to see them together and the teasing is killing me! Of course, given Lucia's personality I think she's should be fairly interested in Hallec as well.

Once again I love how you capture the thoughts and feelings of each character along with your top notch sex description.

(and Jace! Awesome pic! Have to say I was so excited when I saw you made one I was slightly disappointed when it was just Hugo and Iku...hoping for some gigantic sexual mural with everyone... still this one's really hot and you've perfectly portayed both characters.)

Ahhhh.... why must you tease! This story continues to be another example of how good a writer of lemons you are. Again you have plenty of description and great interplay between the characters. You catch their personalities just right.

I especially love how they don't just de-evolve into sexual animals just going through the motions but their talk and go back and forth all throughout.

I hope the little part with Hugo and Lucia wasn't just a tease...I really want to see those to get together!

I also enjoyed Chris's reaction to Hallec. I hope she gets a chance to ride his massive prick!

I can't wait for this to be updated! Ahhh!

This teaser was pretty sweet. Hope to see more soon. Keep going at what you're doing, keep your style. It's good and I like it.
It's nice to see the sex as detailed as you write it. I'm tired of all those lazy writers resuming hours of smut and fuck in two phrases like "And they went at it for hours and in every position imaginable". Well! I'm capable of imagine a lot of things! If I'm reading something you have written it's for see how you describe it, not imagine the whole sex part.
On other order of things, I've been trailing your work for quite a long time. Starting in the Greyarchive, then your personal webpage (which seems not working anymore) and now here. Please, keep writing those awesome fanfics and consider the possibility of making a new Suikoden V one, this time with Sialeeds.
Thank you and cheer up!

dude i luv this
especcially the lucia foursome
never really liked that iku chick but now i think different
u need to continue on it soon!