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April 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This is a good story. I look forward to the next chapter
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March 10, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This has the potential to be good but you should spell check or better yet, have some one beta the story for you. Spelling and grammer mistakes can really be off-putting. It would also be nice if you would stick to one pov or at least say who's point of view it's from, the second chapter threw me for a long while until I realized who it was.
Keep up the work
Keep up the work
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August 1, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I have to say that this is a really good story. Unfortunately, not every fan fic that is posted is reviewed. Hopefully this won't keep you from writting more chapters. Keep up the good work and don't let the lack of reviews get you down.
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January 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Very good
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January 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Please update. I want to know what the other dares are.
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December 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ooh, more dares, more!! =P Hmm, what about a dare that both girls hav to do together? =P
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October 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Interesting I read upto the second dare scenario.
If this is HM AWL then I have to regretfully inform you that Lumina is an ONLY child!
If this is NOT HM A Wonderful Life themn I appologise and will shut my cakehole.
All and all shaping up to be a good fiction peice
If this is HM AWL then I have to regretfully inform you that Lumina is an ONLY child!
If this is NOT HM A Wonderful Life themn I appologise and will shut my cakehole.
All and all shaping up to be a good fiction peice
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June 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
what is an 'organism' in a sexual context? I think you mean orgasm...
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April 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Continue please, I can give a good review if the story is so short!
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March 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
well i think this fic has potential and of course it would be nice to see it continue on i hate to see a fic die