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for Wind Feeds Fire

by Elysia

person Good Luck
schedule January 8, 2010 at 12:00 AM
To my knowledge, FFNet still allows yaoi-centric stories. They just do not allow NC-17 stories anymore. Now, Dart/Albert is an interesting pairing and I think the set-up is interesting as well. Though, like another reviewer said, you should make the chapters longer and bunch the sentences together until they resemble paragraphs. A few spelling mistakes are present too.

All the LoD fics have been left unfinished on here, so I’m doubtful you’ll come back with your friend Mishaela, but I wanted to add my two cents anyways.
person Une
schedule September 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
mm~~~ more! I was so glad when I saw this story, I'd thought this pairing to be far more obvious o.o;;;
person Dannie Yoko
schedule May 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Argh!Cliffhanger!Please continue!L.o.D fics aer hard to find!*offers pockey*Please continue yas story!^ ^
person Yamima
schedule May 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow, I never placed that couple,

continue
person somadrop
schedule January 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I think I read this once, long ago... It's familiar.

At any rate, I'm dropping a line because it seems no one else would. For constructive critisism, you've too many spaces between paragraphs, I think. It breaks things up a bit too much. But elsewise, it's a good start. Why don't you continue?