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Excellent work. Creative, erotic, funny... I could go on. Short version: great story! It's even canon. ^^ However, I must urge you to use a proofreader--a human, not just spellcheck--when you write from now on. The story had more silly little spelling and grammar errors than I could count. Some of them may have been transposition errors or something; converting from Word to .txt can do that, for example. Many others were obviously author error. Go back and look it over once or twice, then get a friend who has good grammar to look it over for you. With this simple step, you'd take great writing and make it nearly perfect. :)

This is reaally excelltn, keep goingman

Wow... Finally the 3rd part. I read the other 2 parts YEARS ago. Good to read the 3rd!

I can't beleive I neglected to post the final part for so long. I check my reviews every few months, but for some reason never realized the CT part cut off like that. Rest assured, it's up now. Hope whoever made those comments is still around...

wheres the rest of it?

Beutiful story!! You gatta make another that continues off of this.. I would pay to read it.

you hit the filesize limit again. you really should do it in seperate chapters and upload it all in one place; it'd be a lot easier, which would be a good thing, since you've got a really, really good story here.

WOW i love it giver me more very soon thank you

Hmm... I just noticed this, but I didn't realize the story was incomplete!

It appears AFF has a limit on story size. Anyway, please read the rest I've
just uploaded.

As for the comment about Crono not being the one to take Marle's
virginity... I wanted to do something different :) This was a story about
Crono and Lucca. And besides, aren't there enough C+M first time lemons
out there? :)

so far so good i like it so far i personaly think crono should have poped her not the guards but oh well i cant wait for more