rate_review Reviews

It was a good story but I've got to complain about your choice of vocabulary during the sex scene. If you're going to write smut then please use words other than 'it' and 'crotch'. I can understand your hesitance at using such words and going into graphic detail but thats why I don't write sex scenes. My suggestion would be that you should read some other fics and get ideas and maybe get more comfortable with that kind of content, then try again for a better worded scene. Keep trying! ^_^

It really is hard to picture Sora as such a devious little boy, but this was still a good fic. I hope you will come up with more of them in the future!