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this story is getting interesting. update soon.

wow, this stroy is VERY original! I never wouldve thought to writ soemthing like this! I love how yu write it! So interesting >w<
I hope you continue it, i want to see what Sephy's plansd are! >w<
and if Riku will agree

WOW!!! This is an amazing story... I know it hard to get a beta so I can forgive the little mistakes...I can't figure what I like best. I definantly like the interaction between Cloud and Sora, it makes a good father son showing, I LOVE the interaction between Sora and Riku. Riku is soo awesomely cunning. The Seph/Cloud interaction is great, though I think Sephiroth would try to lure Cloud out better, and probably molest him within an inch of his life. The only complaint I have is only a tiny bit about Leon. Leon.... seems a little too easily pushed around by Cloud. Leon isn't terribly agressive but... I don't think he'd let Cloud get away so easily. He'd pursue him and try to make him understand more. I think... He'd at least convince Cloud to be a little more intimate with him if only just once. XD Wouldn't that make Sephiroth jealous? Hope my reveiw helps. I want to see options A and B in the next chapter please. I'd also like to be your friend.
Take care and keep the wonderful writing coming. By the way.. my sister wrote the one reveiw this is what I think
I'm Arien and she's Kuinnu. well I'm out!

This is a great story you have! I can't wait to read more. Personally, I think I'd like to see Riku made a deal of sorts with Sephiroth. I'm curious what those two could come up with personally.

Hey, just wanted to say thanks for writing such a great story. I've noticed there are some errors (Adult Fanfiction's fault, I think) so you may want to go through and re-check the chapters. Anyway, I hope you'll be updating soon, your piece inspired me to do a fanfiction piece with Riku and Sora (granted, not a very good one but, hey, it's good practice). You can check it here, if you'd like: http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/61297257/

Thanks again,
CA

Wow. I was just going through lists and came across this piece. Very cool. I couldn't stop reading. I would absolutely love to see where this goes with everyone. Riku and Sora. Cloud, Septh., and Leon. Tidus and maybe Selphie. What happens with the trap and who it happens to? Please do update. [I really hope this piece hasn't become a forgotten piece. It's so fun in a different way.] I look forward to seeing what happens next.

Yay! I ¢¾ your story. :3
I think,
Sephy would try to convince Riku to a deal, but Riku refuses.
Cloud and Sora get into an argument and Sora...swims..? away.
Tidus and Sephline(Or however it's spelled) talk to Arith
Sora goes up to the surface and meets Kairi and Wakka.

:3

But that's just me. You can do whatever. Anyway, back to the first sentance. AWSOME STORY! =D

hmmm... I like this story idea. Your keeping the chars. in char quite well. All the choices look fun but i think that D would be the best option here... ^_^

I love this!!! You definately put time into this to make things work. I'm kinda sad that Cloud hates Leon though, but that's just cuz I like them as a couple. Most of the stuff I've seen where people try to incorporate merfolk and humans into a story end up making the merperson human so they can add a smut scene. It's refreshing to see someone that doesn't waste their time with something they can't pull off. I'm desperately waiting for another chapter, cuz that's what I do. Please don't make me beg, or I shall bug you to death! (By the way, did you ever get that beta?) Best wishes!

Awww is cloud gonna end up with sephiroth or leon? I really like ur sephiroth. He doesnt seem to be that bad. i mean, cloud wouldnt choose him if he didnt like him right? well im more of a sephcloud fan but even if u make it cloudleon, i suppose il just bear with it, only coz ur RikuSora is sooo cute and irresistable. Hehe, and question... how do they mate? LOL i mean, juz confused coz theyr half fish and well i was wondering how they reproduce... shrughs... anyway, plz update and keep up the good work.