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by Sabulana

person The Luggage
schedule April 8, 2004 at 12:00 AM
You are God. *worship* lol
Very graphic imagery and great use of pancakes.
*flails with yaoi happiness*
person Dark Siren
schedule April 7, 2004 at 12:00 AM
XD I love this! ;_; I haven't read any Jak II lemons at all! Had to use my imagination, which is pretty shot at the moment x_x I honestly think you should write more, though I only had very few problems with this ficcie: there were a few spelling errors here and there, but nothing too annoying ^.^ Also, I believed it needed more.. description o_o But all in all, it was a good good good fanfic ^_^

Oh, and they seemed OOC, but who cares! XD I frankly don't care if characters are OOC, because even I do something that is OOC for myself x_x So it's possible for people and characters to not act like themselves somes. es. ^^; Why am I ranting? I have no idea x_x;;

o.o have a Jak and Daxter fic here myself, but I dun know what to do with it anymore ;.; I'm thinking of putting it on hold.. or just giving up >.>...

anyways... x.x

okie, write more! ...gotta review your other Jak II ficcie >D

DS
person Kuroi
schedule April 6, 2004 at 12:00 AM
yet another i love you writing, can't wait for another. Great job on this story!!!
person LittleMissGothicChyld
schedule April 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Whoo! I'm glad me and stacey gave you inspirations hehe! Ya know... You could next time use pieces of glass to cut open small wounds... or even a screwdriver *Smirks* But i likey! *Praises!!!!*