rate_review Reviews

Oh, come on. Separate the paragraphs, do a little proofreading, and this fic would be way better. It wouldn't hurt if you'd add some decent detail and some kind of emotional connection, either - I mean, we don't even get the obligatory "he burned with lust for her body" spiel. That's just sad.

Seriously, I like the pairing, and I applaud anyone who wants to write it, but put some real _effort_ into it!

How about...separating paragraphs? Detail maybe? Grammar? Good idea, bad writing....

Good, I love Ryu/Katts. Spacing between paragraphs would have helped immensely, as well as spelling and grammar check—even manually is better than nothing. But overall, it's a little more than decent.

Proofread this. Seriously. And for the love of all that's good, learn to seperate paragraphs! It's all one big unreadable block of text!

I love the Katt/Ryu paring. You are so awsome for writing this. Good stuff!